WALT: Describe a moment in time in detail.
I heard the engine in front of me. It sounded like 5000000000 elephants running on the street, STOMP, BANG ,ROAR! I heard the screeching on the concrete from the tyres.
I saw the smoke around the car. The colour of the smoke was white I saw the black tyres marks on the concrete.
I felt awesome because it was the coolest thing in the world.
I could do this for hours. One day i want to have a Formula One car.
I wondered if i could do the biggest drift in the world.
Hi Reed
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used onomatopoeia,I love the words you use
STOMP,BANG,ROAR
Next step could you use capital I's
Bye Antonia
Well done Reed Awesome work
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